Essay feed back

This seminar focused the part of the essay we handed in to be assessed. We briefly ran other over all issues which a lot of people had. My essay was about Culture / Subculture and my feed back was I had not understood how too reference and i needed to go into more detail about entrain topics, the feed back also said i had come to a conclusion rather quickly rather than explaining why. Writing is one of my weaker points and I really struggled with the essay. We had to write another 1000 words.